Feb 23, 2012

The Revision of Paraphrase

I am going to fulfill my promise about posting my revision in my first paraphrase assignment. This is it:
After reading the source, I write the important points:
  • laughter, lasting benefits, laughing stops, muscles are more relaxed, relieves some kinds of headaches, heartbeat and blood pressure, dip below normal, a sign of reduced stress, be related to longevity, through the reduction of stress and hypertension.
Raw paraphrase

Laughter leads us to three long term advantages. First, it can cure some kinds of headaches because when it stops, it relaxes muscles. Then, it reduces stress by lowering heartbeat and blood pressure to several points below normal. Finally, it may relate to longer lifespan because of decrease in stress and abnormally high blood pressure.

Final result

Lyons and Courter (1984:6) says that laughter leads us to three long term advantages. First, it can cure some kinds of headaches because when it stops, it relaxes muscles. Then, it reduces stress by lowering heartbeat and blood pressure to several points below normal. Finally, it relates to longer lifespan because of the decrease in stress and abnormally high blood pressure.

All right, I hope that this post can be a good example of a paraphrase.

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